美國留學個人陳述的寫作尤其重要

    美國留學個人陳述寫作非常重要，個人陳述能彌補你的硬件傷，為自己的申請加分，因此常常能決定申請的成敗。尤其是在美國留學申請競爭日趨激烈的今天，個人陳述的寫作更顯的重要。立思辰留學360美國部留學專家為大家總結了在寫個人陳述的開頭段時要注意的問題，避免被一眼秒拒掉。

　　一、重復簡歷型

　　I earned my Bachelor of Science degree in … Sciences with a specialization in … in 2002 at … university

　　點評：美國留學個人陳述不要去重復簡歷中的東西，這在很多學校的PS要求中明確提到，個人陳述的寫作要具體到事件上，事件解決上，而不要單純重復已有的內(nèi)容。

　　二、學校介紹型

　　I am an undergraduate in…University , the largest university anda cradle of scientific and technological talents in China.

　　點評：該同學的個人陳述開頭等于是一個申請學校的簡介，這好像是在幫助學校做宣傳，或表達你有多了解該學校，而不是寫個人陳述了。這是沒有意義的開頭，白白浪費了字數(shù)，最容易被秒據(jù)掉。

　　三、抄襲句式型

　　As a student majoring in Computer Science, I began my odyssey since I entered undergraduate program. Indeed, having entered this splendid computer world, I am more than greedy for something new.

　　點評：Odyssey 和more than greedy for something new 這種句式不知道是從哪里學到的，很多同學在用。但你要知道，老外最恨抄襲，最喜原創(chuàng)，所以利害關系大家想想吧。

　　四、救世主型

　　I am a problem solver. I have an impulse as a kind of instincts to solvevarious problems before me and enjoy doing that. Since I was a little boy, a voice from President Franklin Roosevelt has constantly hovered around my mind, "The world can be changed by man's endeavor, …

　　點評：一副救世主的形象，小時候就受富蘭克林的影響，立志改變世界。個人陳述的寫作一定要個人化具體化，別吹大牛，甚至帶著一種霸權主義思維。

　　五、猶抱琵琶型

　　Making a right decision at the right time is very important for a young people .At present, I have come to a critical point in my life when I have to make a decision concerning my future course of action. Only a perceptive understanding of oneself will enable one to chart his proper action. Aftercarefully thinking, reviewing my life and analyzing my personality, I make the determination and choose to apply for graduate study in XXX. And I choose to specialize in communications which I will pursue a lifelong career.

　　點評：重點放在自己要做重大決定上了，人生的轉(zhuǎn)折點，然后來上句所謂名言警句。浪費字數(shù)，有限的字數(shù)里，同學們應該學會直接，并且抓住重點，突出自己最有優(yōu)勢的方面，最有特色的方面。

　　六、言幼稚型

　　'Why the gecko can climb on the wall while we can't-' 'Why the leaves turn red in autumn' 'How many stars are there in the sky-' When I was in childhood, I always kept asking my mom all kinds of questions。I am especially interested in how things work, I can even take apart things for several hours in order to find out its principle.

　　點評：上來就回憶童年少年自己如何有著遠大抱負，who cares。個人陳述字數(shù)有限，卻用這么多話描述童年，沒有任何意義。學校想知道你如何看待未來，而不是如何度過過去。

　　立思辰留學360美國部留學專家提醒大家，以上六種美國留學個人陳述的開頭方式一定要盡力避免，申請美國大學的申請人越來越多，申請競爭越來越激烈，大家精心準備的個人陳述希望成為大家被錄取的亮點，而不是成為大家申請成功的絆腳石。